Fallen Thrice

Can i be honest here? It is an amazing plot. Nice trope. But the reason I only have given three stars are here: 1. '......... ' lots of these dots are distracting and kinda unprofessional. 2. some of the conversations are awkward and not really the way you usually talk. Try to use simple words while doing conversations. use big words in the narration, but never in conversations. 3. Try to shorten the narration and lengthen the meeting between people. Let them speak the story rather than putting everything in the paragraph. 4. There is a lot of telling. Try to show it to your readers. The surprise, the anger. "she is very angry. She is enraged." ⬇ "She gritted her teeth and looked like she is going to punch something." (That way, the story will be gripping.) 5. edit. edit. edit. if Grammar mistakes and unwanted bits go away, this story can shine. Hope it helps. keep writing.

amazing. seriously. the way of story narrating, done in step by step. n the confrontation scene! I loved it. keep writing.

Really Nice Story By Reading this one i remember of someone i really like a lot All the Best Bhavana Akka Hope u write many more short stories like this