Don't I Deserve Love?

par excellence, madam. such type of Creations last forever. a social phenomena of LADY IS APPARENTLY SEEN IN THE STORY. NORMALCY IN EVENTS AND POSITIVITY IN THE CHARACTER OF VIDA IS REALLY APPRECIABLE. TRANSFER OF LOVE FROM HUSBAND 2 ISSUES BEARS A PSYCHOLOGICAL EFFECT OVER A LADY DURING THE AGE AND THE SAME ENHANCES THE BEAUTY OF YOUR STORY ALEINLY . A CULTURAL ATTACHMENT IS CONCEALED IN THE WHOLE LITERATURE . AGAIN WELCOME FOR CHOOSING SUCH A TOPIC . HEARTY WISHES!

The memories of the sky are the birds. There are few hearts that live in tears as long as the penances are just as long as life is up to life.Love travels in life like an under sea. Write More Greetings. All the best

Apologies for this in advance. The story you have to tell is good, but it has been done countless times before. A woman growing up and being forced to sactrifice her life for some man who barely cares for her, or even cares enough to not sleep around. Usually, when writing about this, you either need to tell the story spectacularly, with unique descriptions and metaphors and characters who seem alive, or have a completely new take on it, where the woman narrating the story does something selfish or needy or crazy and proves that she too is 'human'. Unfortunately, while there were times when the writing was good, neither of the above two happened. Your English is good, but when you go overboard with descriptions. 'Decanter-shaped waist', for example. Some lines are so heartfelt and moving, and then some others are just jarring to me. I feel this can be told so much better, but it is just a reader's opinion. As the author, feel free to completely disregard this. Your story is YOUR story. :) Looking forward to more. Cheers.